Well, that can't be right!
I need that!
Well, no I didn't, but I still catch myself using that little stinker of a word. Hey, that's just me.
She stood up. Well how else would she stand? Simply write, She stood. I felt the heat of a blush creep up my neck. I was rather embarassed that I'd made such a silly mistake. Now she's telling me editors do not like the word up being used willy-nilly, such as in She looked up at him. Well, now, how silly is that?
If my hero is six-foot-two and my heroine if five-foot-two, she's either going to look up at him during conversation or study his chest hairs. I mean...I need that up word.
Then she picked apart another darling sentence of mine--oh, I've got a zillion of 'em, folks. A slow smile spread across his face. Where else would a smile spread, my agent asked? I stared at that remark for a few beats, then I slapped my hand over my eyes. She's killing me here. Don't we often use wordy phrases simply because it sounds nice? Personally, I like the sentence like that; it brightens up my day.
Oh, but there were others. You can believe that!
He slammed the door shut became He slammed the door.
She went back downstairs became She went downstairs.
She slipped her shoes on her feet became She slipped on her shoes.
He sat down in a chair became He sat. Okay, so I'm a wordy person. So shoot me. Point taken. We allow--or at least I do--lazy habits to invade our writing. And those buggers sneak in without my realizing that they have. The dastardly devils. Evidently they sneak into others' writings, too, because now that Agent Lady has stripped every unneeded word from my manuscript, I can see them in others. I read in a story last night that a smile bloomed across her face. And I wanted to snigger and say, "Where else would her smile be, but on her face?"
What about you? Do you use words that are unneeded? I'm betting that you do.