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French counterterrorism agent is cleaning the minor wounds of American Crime Scene Photographer, Gwen, who teases him about kissing her "boo-boos." She's always teasing Jean-Luc and he's had enough of it. Deciding to call her bluff. He forks his fingers in her hair and issues a command.
“Look
at me.”
As
if she could look anywhere else.
His
head lowered one fraction of an inch at a time as if to prolong the suspense of
the moment. All the while his dark eyes remained locked on hers. Tension coiled
in the pit of her stomach. She waited—and waited. Finally, his warm lips made
contact.
Oh. My. God.
11 comments:
Oh my God! Is right! I jumped when I read that.
It really sounded quick. Loved the tone. Great post.
This is excellent! I love how it put me right there in the mood with the characters and I could feel their chemistry sparkle!
That's the trouble with teasing - sometimes you get what you really want.
You condensed a tonne of chemistry and attraction into a few short sentences; well done.
Thank you, Michael. These two have been dancing around each other for months, everytime Gween travels to Paris to visit her sister.
Thanks Lauren. Writing that first kiss is always difficult for me.
Thanks Elaine. These two have it bad for each other even if they're determined not to admit it.
Nice way to build the suspense - I wasn't sure he was going to kiss her so *I* was on the edge of MY seat LOL. Great snippet!
Thanks Veronica!!
I really love the periods in the last line. I could hear her voice when I read that line even if she's only thinking it.
This snippet is deeeeelicious!
Now, to wipe this silly smirk off my face.
Really good job of drawing the reader into the scene. :-)
What a great teaser!
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