Blog by VONNIE DAVIS -- International, Award-Winning Romance Author: Adventurous...Humorous...Amorous.

Saturday, April 27, 2013

Eight Sentence Sunday ~ Get Your Eight On!

Welcome to my contribution to Eight Sentence Sunday. Don't stop with me. Click on the link below to access the list of many, many talented writers who also share an eight-sentence snippet. I guarantee you you'll come across some great talents.
 
 
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French counterterrorism agent is cleaning the minor wounds of American Crime Scene Photographer, Gwen, who teases him about kissing her "boo-boos." She's always teasing Jean-Luc and he's had enough of it. Deciding to call her bluff. He forks his fingers in her hair and issues a command.  
 
 
“Look at me.”
As if she could look anywhere else.
His head lowered one fraction of an inch at a time as if to prolong the suspense of the moment. All the while his dark eyes remained locked on hers. Tension coiled in the pit of her stomach. She waited—and waited. Finally, his warm lips made contact.
Oh. My. God.

12 comments:

Michael Estey said...

Oh my God! Is right! I jumped when I read that.
It really sounded quick. Loved the tone. Great post.

Lauren said...

This is excellent! I love how it put me right there in the mood with the characters and I could feel their chemistry sparkle!

Elaine Smith said...

That's the trouble with teasing - sometimes you get what you really want.
You condensed a tonne of chemistry and attraction into a few short sentences; well done.

Vonnie Davis ~ Romance Author said...

Thank you, Michael. These two have been dancing around each other for months, everytime Gween travels to Paris to visit her sister.

Vonnie Davis ~ Romance Author said...

Thanks Lauren. Writing that first kiss is always difficult for me.

Vonnie Davis ~ Romance Author said...

Thanks Elaine. These two have it bad for each other even if they're determined not to admit it.

Veronica Scott said...

Nice way to build the suspense - I wasn't sure he was going to kiss her so *I* was on the edge of MY seat LOL. Great snippet!

Vonnie Davis ~ Romance Author said...

Thanks Veronica!!

Daniel said...

I really love the periods in the last line. I could hear her voice when I read that line even if she's only thinking it.

Teresa Cypher said...

This snippet is deeeeelicious!

Now, to wipe this silly smirk off my face.

Really good job of drawing the reader into the scene. :-)

Angela Adams said...

What a great teaser!

Brandellavanela said...

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Have a great week!